Workshop Your Query
Does this query reflect the arc of my story?
The arc between reality and illusion quickly crumbles as the truth is revealed to Seventeen-year-old Mia Slathe. Forced into annihilation by the one person she most trusted, Gabriel, she lives counting sunrises until that day. Before her time is up, she would do anything to see her family one last time.
Her plan cannot backfire. Two warriors of the secret order are rumored to be inhuman perfection. And as much as they have trained her in the arts of destruction, guard her with as much finesse as a prick finger takes to a cactus, these bottom feeders are her executioners. There’s no choice for her but to swallow her hatred, face her fears and use her wits and intelligence to find another way out from the secret order by using them. Her lists of problems continue to grow as she finds herself struggling with internal voices that provoke chaos. She sets off to locate the lost Aumeros for the sake of proving a worthy candidate to keep around. Gabriel remains her link to salvation and now he’s gone missing. She starts to question her coerced involvement, making her wonder, why her?
Timing couldn’t be worse. Her plans were starting to show results. An inhuman warrior would soon have to choose between his blood brother and her love. But when misty shadows appear from nowhere trying to lure her into an early death, her memory starts to falter, and someone will pay the ultimate price.
For those who know, this has been a struggle---not an unusual struggle either. We all face this. It's hard trying to break out of synopsis mode. I clock in at 244 words. I was thinking, if I shorten this, maybe, I could reach that arc? Help please. . .