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Hello fellow writers,
I am just starting the querying process, having sent out three queries so far and having received one rejection with two possibly pending. I figured that I would ask your advice before continuing to submit a poorly written query. There are some wonderful insights out there and I am hoping I can get some of you to help me clean up my letter.
Thanks in advance to all!
I am the author of The Dorian Stone, a 131,000 word Urban Fantasy novel that is the first of an intended three part series.
For three thousand years Athena has longed for death, her incessant heart beating with only one other desire – to fulfill her promise of vengeance on someone who, like her, is incapable of dying.
Athena’s world has become much simpler these days – she merely exists. Wrapped in a growing shroud of detachment, her adopted human son, Michael, is the only salve for her slipping sanity. When a haunting face from her past checks in to her world-renowned hotel, the visage rips her numbness away, forcing an enduring vow of revenge to the forefront of her mind. As hotel guests begin to turn up dead or missing and her son becomes tormented with violent images, Athena must find a way to stop an ancient enemy before she once again loses the only thing she holds dear, her family. From Macedonia, 1262 BCE to the present, we follow Athena as she strives to save those she loves, while revealing the true origins of vampires.
This is a novel with two story arcs, one in present day Chicago and one creatively using actual historical events beginning in Ancient Greece. The present’s main protagonist, Michael, gives us a viewpoint into the vampire world as a human standing on its fringes. The story in Ancient Greece follows a still human Athena, our protagonist and only point of view character as she stumbles across a dangerous power hidden in the woods bordering her citadel. These seemingly separate stories converge at the climax, the past section explaining the actions and motivations of the characters in the present.
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Again, thank you. All critiques, critisisms welcome