The Song The Bards Won't Sing

By Revenant

Draft 1 Posted Date: 5/3/2012

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Traditional Fantasy

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About the Book:

My first attempt at a young adult book. This is a prologue and I want to know: Does it work as YA? Does it intrigue you?

About the Author:

My name is Scott Reintgen. I am writing a novel, Revenant, that will hopefully remind people of the "kyngs and knyghtes and grete dedes" of old.

Author's Note:

This is my first attempt at YA. I'm aware that it's a short excerpt. Also, know that this is a prologue... These characters will not be heard from again. We will hear ABOUT them, not from them. I'd love to know: - Is this effective for YA? Is the language fitting? It's a "dark" opening, but is it TOO dark? - Are you intrigued by this chapter? This is a MOMENTOUS occasion and will be referred back to a lot, but I want to know if it works on its own. - World-Building- I wanted to make it as subtle as possible. Did this work? Did you need more? Less? Thanks for reading!

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