By JRVogt

Draft 1 Posted Date: 3/16/2011

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Traditional Fantasy

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About the Book:

Vece - A ceremonial warrior desperate to prove she's superior to her older sister. Lasay - A prostitute determined to free herself from a hopeless life. Ondone - A half-wit theatre apprentice who is the only witness to a horrific tragedy. They each have a strong connection to the shadow magic that has been used in their city for generations--a magic mostly used for entertainment, fashion, and frivolity. Yet when the shadows inexplicably take on a life of their own, and a growing madness infects the kingdom, these three are tied together in a struggle to undo the changes before their entire civilization is destroyed.

About the Author:

Part fiction writer. Part freelance writer. 100% storyteller. 100% geek. (sucks at adding up percentages, though)

Author's Note:

My greatest struggle so far has been with the initial pacing and finding how best to slip backstory into events without massive infodumps. The first few chapters have undergone some extensive revisions, and this is the latest version to be held up to the light. Also, some might classify this as epic/high fantasy, though I don't believe the scope is as wide most entries in that genre.

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